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Post by Overlord Epsilon on Jan 10, 2008 15:28:45 GMT -6
Indeed.
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Post by Overlord Omega on Jan 13, 2008 8:11:49 GMT -6
Yup.
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Post by Overlord Gamma (the great) on Jan 19, 2008 11:57:24 GMT -6
So, how did you guys like my speech the other day (as in the material, not my fidgetting)?
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Post by Overlord Omega on Jan 20, 2008 19:46:07 GMT -6
Well, here's my officail critique. 1. I liked the part where you started off, saying that it was a peice about speech and then JKing them. That was good. 2. Did you have an intro? If you did, I couldn't tell. All speeches have an intro, and I can explain how to deliver them at school if you'd like. 3. You seemed to jump from topic to topic rather quickly (and I know that's your writing style, but at times it was a little TOO crazy, and I had trouble connecting the events.) 4. I loved where you get people worked up about the prank, but the leave them hanging, however you could put even more emphisis on how great the prank is, get their mouths watering even MORE, and make the blow harder. 5. Keep in mind that there are very few football players in speech, so alot of your audiance may not be framiliar with the terms, and you may have to suttely explain key elements. 6. You're storytelling voice is hilarious! I LOVE LISTENING TO YOU! 7. You said that you had other peices written and that you had cut alot out of all three? I'd like to see the full versions of them myself, if you wouldn't mind. 8. Mrs. Johnson was right about you talking really fast. I couldn't understand you at times. (And don't take it personally, cause I do the same thing. Mr. Davidson is always on my ass about it. ) 9. I can tell that you're passionate about the story you're telling. I like the sparkle that you get in your eyes. We can tell you're going to say something funny, and that's key in the peice's delivery. 10. Find a title. (Though, your little bit about not finding a title WAS funny). What I'd do is I'd say instead how hard it was for you to find a title for the peice and use the same lines, because Judges get cranky if you don't have a title and points will be lost. All in all, Geoff, I loved it. The best peices are written from personal experiances, and you've already got the art of crafting personal stories down. What you need to do now is to take it to as many coaches and upperclasmen as you can and listen to all their opinions. (DO NOT listen to the advice of just ONE coach because that's what got me screwed over with Purvis last year.) Then use the advice that YOU think is relevant to your peice (You being the one who wrote it in the first place and no one has a better understanding of it than yourself.) and GO WITH IT! You're going to dominate the novice meet at least, but there are some VERY good CX writers out there, so be careful. But have fun. Speech is amazing and there are so many cool people in it, you're going to have a blast. Learn from your opponents, don't hold grudges. (It's hard. That Nathan Fry kid I was pitted against last year still makes me cringe.) But it's better if you can befriend them and learn their tecniques. (Even if it's just so you can steal their stratigies, it's always better to befriend them.) And I'll help you too. This is my third year in speech, and I've seen alot of creative ex peices, so I'm not a complete greenhorn. I'll try to help in any way I can.
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Post by Overlord Epsilon on Jan 27, 2008 18:59:23 GMT -6
I already told you mine.
1. Stop playing with your pants. 2. Don't sway from side to side. 3. No half gestures.
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Post by Overlord Epsilon on May 7, 2008 15:56:53 GMT -6
Since Gamma will never come back on here, I will bring closure to this topic. Gamma named his speech piece,"My Fractured Thoughts" which is pretty funny. He placed at sub-sections, but did not go on. He now hates hippies because of one judge he had at Cannon Falls.
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Post by Overlord Omega on May 17, 2008 22:46:55 GMT -6
I found it odd that your psychologist, Geoff's doctor and my waiter all had the same voice.
"And how does that make YOU feel?"
"He fractured his clavicle in three places"
"A blend of tomato and canola oils..."
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Post by Overlord Gamma (the great) on Nov 27, 2008 22:13:10 GMT -6
Since Gamma will never come back on here, I will bring closure to this topic. Gamma named his speech piece,"My Fractured Thoughts" which is pretty funny. He placed at sub-sections, but did not go on. He now hates hippies because of one judge he had at Cannon Falls. Holy Jeebus Jacob...I'm dissapointed in you. That's at least the 5th time you've thought of me as gone forever, but I actually appreciate that you put some closure to this...then again...the whole point of my speech was that there isn't always closure...but I still appreciate it.
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Post by Overlord Gamma (the great) on Nov 27, 2008 22:21:40 GMT -6
Anyway, now I can start posting 'bout my speech ideas for THIS year. Here's a list of my ideas:
Does a Woodchuck Chuck Wood (side note: NO, not THAT kind of wood) $My Thoughts: ISS Day 2 $The Internal Clock $The Little Stories X Number of Things to Say (or Not Say) to a Speech Judge/Coach
$=G-Money=My best ideas (in my opinion) I was planning on doing TLS this year, but the more I think about it, the more I seem to lean toward MT:ISSD2, and TIC (hey, that's funny AND ironic, I didn't notice that 'till just now (lqts)) I was planning on saving for next year. You know, when Michael's NOT here. Your guys' thoughts?
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Post by omicron27 on Dec 6, 2008 11:18:10 GMT -6
See, Jof? I'm not as bad as that jakub person.
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Post by Overlord Gamma (the great) on Dec 9, 2008 20:55:24 GMT -6
Ya, your WORSE cuz u always talk shit about me while im away *gives evil glare*
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Post by Overlord Gamma (the great) on Jan 16, 2009 23:53:33 GMT -6
Well good news all, I had my first Speech Practice today (Jan. 17, 2009) w/ Mrs. Johnson before school (although I originally planned on Mrs. Purvis after school, but there were some complications...). So anyway, I decided to go w/ MT:ISSD2. Ya, TLS didn't turn out as good as I thought it would, but MT:ISSD2 (which I will now refer to as "MID2" for short (My Thoughts: ISS Day 2)) is excellent. I can't remember the last time I wrote such a good first draft! I won't post the whole thing: 1. I don't feel like using up that much space and 2. A teaser, so here's my intro...
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Post by Overlord Gamma (the great) on Jan 16, 2009 23:58:43 GMT -6
How many times do I have to say this?! I’m innocent I tells ya, I’m innocent! Yes, of course I know who really did it. It was Clucky, I never did like the way that ceramic rooster just stares into space nonstop. I always knew that he was up to no good. Well maybe the weld job on that cage wasn’t as good as we thought it was. Hey, I am not crazy, I’m delusional, and I would very much appreciate it if you didn’t mix the two up. What? You can’t prove that…how did you know about that?! Alright, I admit it, it was me…I stole the cookie from the cookie jar! And I’d do it again if given the chance. [Maniacal laughter]…And that’s how I wound up here, in “In School Suspension.” Then again, many consider me lucky that I didn’t get expelled. As for me, I thought that it would be great: catch some z’s, sit around and do nothing, catch some more z’s. But people have this nasty habit of underestimating their circumstances. For two days, I rotted in that isolated prison, and this is my story, My Thoughts ISS Day 2.
Which reminds me, I still need to introduce you guys to clucky!
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Post by Overlord Delta on Jan 17, 2009 18:06:19 GMT -6
I found that intro pretty damn awesome.
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Post by Overlord Gamma (the great) on Jan 17, 2009 21:50:23 GMT -6
;D Thnx! Wait 'till you hear the rest of it! It's totally kick-ass! ;D
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